Writing

Robbed

“Put your hands on the ground” screamed the TV. I slowly crept out of bed. And turned the TV off. I looked and realized on the calender that I was going to the movies with my friend. I quickly got changed brushed my teeth. And bolted threw the door. When I arrived I thought to myself that I should get some money out. So I went to the bank. When I arrived outside of the bank. I saw a black van. Which had a dodgey man inside it. He wore a black hoddie. But I couldn’t see the face.

So I walked in the bank. And said to the teller. “Hi there can I have $50 please”. The teller shook his head nervously. And I thought to myself that’s a bit suspicious. Just then I heard someone say. “Get on the ground”. So of course I face planted my head on the ground. Then ever so slightly tilted my head to the robber. And recognized the hooded man. Then he darted to his van. And drove away. Then I thought to myself about the number plate 6ml21b. So I dialed 111 with my aching fingers. Then the cops came. So quickly I told them the number plate.

So the police offered to take me with them. because I gave information. So excitedly I said yes. A long time past and we caught up to him. And put road spikes. Down in front of his van. And he drifted to the side of the road. Then the cops put him to justice. And since I gave information I got a reward of $200. And it all ended with a great ending.

Did you enjoy reading my story? yes My story was a narrative. Did you think the resolution to my problem was realistic? yes but some bits werent as good as thee others Do you think I used creative language? yes Are there any comments you would like to make? you could have used more description.